Apartment is better to live
학생이 쓴 원문
I prefer apartment in countryside to just house. It\'s because apartment\'s facility is better than common house\'s. First, in summer it\'s very hot and in winter it\'s very cold in common houses. I hate both hot and cold. So I want to live in, \'cool and warm home\'. It is apartment. Second, usual house is smaller than apartment. Big house is very expensive, so I think apartment is proper to live. Third, it can be more safe than house. In the case of apartment, thief can\'t get into by windows because it is too tall. In conclusion, I think apartment is better to live than house.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Daniel! Thank you so much for your effort. However, your sentences need to
be more organized. Keep on practicing!
- Teacher Debbie
>> I prefer an apartment in the countryside to a house.
It\'s because apartment\'s facility is better than common house\'s.
>> It\'s because an apartment\'s facility is better than a house.
First, in summer it\'s very hot and in winter it\'s very cold in common houses.
>> A house can be very hot in summer and very cold in winter.
I hate both hot and cold. So I want to live in, \'cool and warm home\'.
>> I hate both hot and cold, so I want to live in a \"cool and warm home.\"
It is apartment.
>> It is an apartment.
Second, usual house is smaller than apartment.
>> In addition, a house is usually smaller than an apartment.
Big house is very expensive, so I think apartment is proper to live.
>> Big houses are very expensive, so I think it\'s better to live in apartments.
Third, it can be more safe than house.
>> Apartments are safer than houses.
In the case of apartment, thief can\'t get into by windows because it is too tall.
>> Thieves can\'t go through the windows of the apartments because they are too high.
In conclusion, I think apartment is better to live than house.
>> In conclusion, I think it\'s better to live in an apartment than in a house.
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