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Hello there, Se [이름]!
Internet can improve the quality of education in many ways. It opens doorways to a wealth of information, knowledge, and educational resources, increasing opportunities for learning in and beyond the classroom.
-Kristine ^^
What do you usually do on the Internet?
>> Correct.
When I use my Internet, I have two things to do.
>> I must do two things when I use the internet.
Those are studying and watching videos.
>> I must study and watch videos online.
Everyday, I have homeworks from my school and I also study french, english, math and science.
>> I have homework from school every day, and I also study Math, Science, English, and French.
When I finish my day, I watch Youtube or Netflix.
>> I finish my day by watching Netflix or YouTube.
So I stay on the Internet morn than 8 hours every day.
>> Therefore, I
spend more than eight hours every day online.
Do you do any shopping on the Internet?
>> Correct.
I do shooing on the Internet sometime.
>> I sometimes use the internet to shop.
The Amazon website is very popular in Canada,
>> Amazon is very popular in Canada.
So when I want
to buy something, I use Amazon to but what I want.
>> I utilize Amazon to make purchases whenever I want.
How often do you go online?
>> Correct.
I go online eveyday.
>> I go online every day.
Or >> I use the internet daily.
I have to study and watch videos on online like I said it before and I use it over than 8 hours.
>> I mentioned earlier that I have to study and watch movies online, and I use it for more than eight hours each day.
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