Applying high integrety standarnds

2010-09-16 · 첨삭 강사 Nicole

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President Lee announced that his administration will apply high standards in terms of integrety for nominees after it had happend that the nominees, who were Kim for the prime minister and Shin for the minister of education were rejected for their position. In fact, he should have done that earlier since there is no doubt why the positions require high integrity. Actually, I was disappoined becasue the president knew about the nominees' corruptions but he nominated them ingoring their integrety. Furthermore, he said that he chose Kim because people living in the province where Kim comes from, are not positive about his administration. In my opinion, the prime minister's job is not to comfort the public but to lead Korean society managing goverment.

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Hi [이름] J It’s about time to have a background check for officials who plan to run our country. Thank you for the composition and hope you will have a great day. I will hear from you again tomorrow. --Nicole--   President Lee announced that his administration will apply high standards in terms of integrety for nominees after it had happend that the nominees, who were Kim for the prime minister and Shin for the minister of education were rejected for their position. >> President Lee announced that his administration will apply high standards in terms of integrity for nominees after what had happened to Kim nominated as a prime minister and Shin for minister of education, who were both rejected for their position. In fact, he should have done that earlier since there is no doubt why the positions require high integrity. >> Correct Actually, I was disappoined becasue the president knew about the nominees' corruptions but he nominated them ingoring their integrety. >> Actually, I was disappointed because the President knew about the nominees' corruptions but he nominated them and ignored their integrity. Furthermore, he said that he chose Kim because people living in the province where Kim comes from, are not positive about his administration. >> Furthermore, he said he chose Kim because his hometown people are not positive about his administration. In my opinion, the prime minister's job is not to comfort the public but to lead Korean society managing goverment. >> In my opinion, the prime minister's job is not to comfort the public but to lead Korean society by managing government well.  

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