April 5, 2016

2016-04-07 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

학생이 쓴 원문

Mr. [Name] apologizes for security guard punch When can we find the conglomerate who keeps in mind the well known saying, "noblesse oblige"? Mr. [Name] is one of the most famous pizza franchise in Korea and the CEO belongs to upper class. However, he just expressed his feeling by punching security guard multiple times because the guard locked door and hence kept the CEO waiting for several minutes. The door must be locked after 10 PM and the guard just did his job. Although the CEO apologizes the guard late, the incident presents the current fact that almost upper classes don't live up to their level.

강사 첨삭

  Hello James!   You are really improving. Some reminders: 1. One of the + PLURAL NOUN example: This is one of the cars that run on hydrogen.   2. Almost is usually followed by a number or quantifier (90%, all). The quantifier can be followed by the phrase \"of the,\" but not of\" or \"the\" alone. example: Almost all Japanese (people) eat rice.   Teacher Venus^^   Mr. [Name] apologizes for security guard punch >>>CORRECTWhen can we find the conglomerate who keeps in mind the well known saying, \"noblesse oblige\"? >>>CORRECT   Mr. [Name] is one of the most famous pizza franchise in Korea and the CEO belongs to upper class. >>>Mr. [Name] is one of the most famous pizza franchises in Korea and the CEO belongs to the upper class. However, he just expressed his feeling by punching security guard multiple times because the guard locked door and hence kept the CEO waiting for several minutes. The door must be locked after 10 PM and the guard just did his job. >>>However, he just expressed his feeling by punching the security guard multiple times because the guard locked the door and hence kept the CEO waiting for several minutes.   The door must be locked after 10 PM and the guard just did his job. >>>CORRECTAlthough the CEO apologizes the guard late, the incident presents the current fact that almost upper classes don\'t live up to their level. >>>Although the CEO apologizes to the guard late, the incident presents the current fact that almost all people who belong to upper classes don\'t live up to their level.  

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