April 7, 2016
학생이 쓴 원문
Descendants of Product PLacement (PPL)
One of the Korean drama is currently sweeping east-north Asia, descendants of sun. The drama infuses life into depressed Korean wave and hence it is received a favorable evaluation by many cultural experts.
However, it is lately caught up in controversy due to excessive PPL advertisement. The controversial scene is the situation where a lead male character kisses his counterpart female one in a luxury sedan with turning on automatic drive mode. It seems too dangerous while it is supposed to be romantic.
It might be important to keep contract with sponsor by exposing its product, the luxury sedan, but I think that it is obligatory to make viewer comfortable watching the drama during running time.
강사 첨삭
Hello James!
You are getting better everyday. Some reminders:
An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that renames another noun right beside it.
example:
One of the Korean dramas, Descendants of the Sun, is currently sweeping northeast Asia.
Teacher Venus^^
Descendants of Product PLacement (PPL)>>>CORRECT
One of the Korean drama is currently sweeping east-north Asia, descendants of sun.
>>>One of the Korean dramas, Descendants of the Sun, is currently sweeping northeast Asia.
The drama infuses life into depressed Korean wave and hence it is received a favorable evaluation by many cultural experts.>>>The drama infuses life into the depressed Korean wave and hence it has received a favorable evaluation by many cultural experts.
However, it is lately caught up in controversy due to excessive PPL advertisement.
>>>However, it is lately caught up in controversy due to excessive PPL advertisements.
The controversial scene is the situation where a lead male character kisses his counterpart female one in a luxury sedan with turning on automatic drive mode.
>>>The controversial scene is the situation where the lead male character kisses his leading lady in a luxury sedan while turning on the automatic drive mode.
It seems too dangerous while it is supposed to be romantic.
>>>CORRECTIt might be important to keep contract with sponsor by exposing its product, the luxury sedan, but I think that it is obligatory to make viewer comfortable watching the drama during running time.
>>>It might be important to keep the contract with sponsors by exposing their product, the luxury sedan, but I think that it is obligatory to make viewers comfortable watching the drama.
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