Are Asians blessed with great body figure than other races? What do you think?
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Definitely not. Each race has advantages and disadvantages. Or I can say each race has its own character. When it comes to body figure, Asians have both advantages and disadvantages compare to others; Advantages are clearer skin, more slim body, and babier face. Disadvantages are less muscles, worse ratio of body figure and smaller eyes. So we are blessed with anti-aging and diet system in our body, but not good with muscles nor smaller head. Of course this is my opinion and these features could be differ from each person. But, I\'m describing characteristics on average Asians comparing to other races. Overall, as you can see, It couldn\'t be said that Asians have better body figure.
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Are Asians blessed with great body figure than other races?
What do you think?
Definitely not. Each race has advantages and disadvantages.
>>> CORRECT
Or I can say each race has its own character.
>>> CORRECT
When it comes to body figure, Asians have both advantages and disadvantages compare to others;
>>> When it comes to body figure, Asians have both advantages and disadvantages compare to other races.
Advantages are clearer skin, more slim body, and babier face.
>>> The advantages are clearer skin, slimmer body, and having babyface.
Disadvantages are less muscles, worse ratio of body figure and smaller eyes.
>>> The disadvantages are fewer muscles, a worse ratio of body figure, and smaller eyes.
So we are blessed with anti-aging and diet system in our body, but not good with muscles nor smaller head.
>>> So we are blessed with anti-aging and diet system in our body, but not with muscles nor smaller head.
Of course this is my opinion and these features could be differ from each person.
>>> Of course this is my opinion and these features could differ from each person.
But, I\'m describing characteristics on average Asians comparing to other races.
>>> CORRECT
Overall, as you can see, It couldn\'t be said that Asians have better body figure.
>>> Overall, as you can see, it couldn\'t be said that Asians have a better body figure.
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