Are children becoming more dangerous and violent?
학생이 쓴 원문
Compared with the past, children are becoming more dangerous and violent. Nowadays, most children spend thime on playing computer or video game. From these, they can live virtual space and sometimes they\'re confused what is reality or not, because they are still immature. Another reason, we have only one child or 2, they haven\'t got a chance to learn patience and sharing. They act directly without any hasitating. All these reasons affect to them.
강사 첨삭
I agree with you, [이름]!
It\'s actually quite disturbing how these kids are turning out these days.
Proper guidance is truly important. ^^
~t. Ally
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Compared with the past, children are becoming more dangerous and violent.
>> CORRECT!
Nowadays, most children spend thime on playing computer or video game.
>> Nowadays, most children spend their time on playing computer or video game.
From these, they can live virtual space and sometimes they\'re confused what is reality or not, because they are still immature.
>> From these, they can live in a virtual space and sometimes they\'re confused about what is reality or not, because they are still immature.
Another reason, we have only one child or 2, they haven\'t got a chance to learn patience and sharing.
>> CORRECT!
They act directly without any hasitating. All these reasons affect to them.
>> They act directly without any hesitation. All these reasons affect them.
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