Are computers making our ability to remember better or worse? Give some examples.

2016-01-14 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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As technologies advance, we seem to less use our brain than before. When there were no cell phones that had a phone book feature, we used to memorize telephone numbers of our friends and relatives. Now I can remember only two or three phone numbers. I sometimes forget even my own phone number. Modern or advanced electronic gadgets or computers made our life much easier and more convenient. However, we are getting more dependent on them and can’t live even a day without them. For instance, when we lose our cell phones, we will be in big trouble because we are not able to make an important call to our business partners or friends. Moreover, all our important schedule and memos are stored in the cell phone, so our personal and professional life will be in jeopardy. Computers are the same. We heavily rely on computers in today’s working environment. Instead of memorizing, we simply store information in the computer. Computers are making us dumbers even though we don't notice it.

강사 첨삭

Great day, Sir [이름]!

Happy Thursday!

I am guilty! Hihihi. I can\'t leave the house without my cellphone.

When I forgot it at home, it\'s like my day isn\'t complete.

We should be disciplined in using gadgets.

It is because we don\'t notice things that really matters when we are busy with our cellphones.

We can talk more about this in our class.

Teacher Nina


As technologies advance, we seem to less use our brain than before.

>> CORRECT

When there were no cell phones that had a phone book feature, we used to memorize telephone numbers of our friends and relatives.

>> CORRECT

Now I can remember only two or three phone numbers.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: I can only remember two or three phone numbers now.

I sometimes forget even my own phone number.

>> Better: I even sometimes forget my own phone number.

Modern or advanced electronic gadgets or computers made our life much easier and more convenient.

>> CORRECT

However, we are getting more dependent on them and can’t live even a day without them.

>> CORRECT

For instance, when we lose our cell phones, we will be in big trouble because we are not able to make an important call to our business partners or friends.

>> CORRECT

Moreover, all our important schedule and memos are stored in the cell phone, so our personal and professional life will be in jeopardy. 

>> CORRECT

Computers are the same.

>> CORRECT

We heavily rely on computers in today’s working environment.

>> CORRECT

Instead of memorizing, we simply store information in the computer.

>> CORRECT

Computers are making us dumbers even though we don\'t notice it.

>> CORRECT

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