Are conflicts are necessary for healthy relationships?
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I disagree with the fact that conflicts are necessary for healthy relationships. In order to have a good and long lasting relationship, conflicts should be avoided as much as possible. If a conflict is inevitable, the less and the lighter is the better. A conflict does not help to build a successful relationship. A conflict triggers strong emotions and can lead to hurt feelings, disappointment, and discomfort. It will adversely affect the relationships because as a conflict becomes deeper, you might cross the line to say words to hurt his/her feeling. The emotional scar you received during the dispute might not be cured shortly and remain permanently. The feeling hurt could surface anytime again when your relationship is in trouble. But, a conflict is a part of life. The best way to deal with the situation is that you should control yourself not to humiliate others even when a conflict gets fierce. When you are in control of your emotions, you can communicate your opinion effectively.
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I am just curious, how do you solve a conflict at work? At home?
But if it is already a personal question, it is okay for you not to answer it.
For me, whenever I have a conflict with someone who is really special for me I have difficulty in concentrating and sleeping. How about you? Tell it in class. See you!
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I disagree with the fact that conflicts are necessary for healthy relationships.
>> Correct!
>> OR: I disagree with the fact that conflicts are necessary to have a healthy relationship.
In order to have a good and long lasting relationship, conflicts should be avoided as much as possible.
>> Correct!
If a conflict is inevitable, the less and the lighter is the better.
>> If a conflict is inevitable, the less and the lighter is better.
>> OR: If a conflict is inevitable, the less and the lighter argument is better.
A conflict does not help to build a successful relationship.
>> Correct!
A conflict triggers strong emotions and can lead to hurt feelings, disappointment, and discomfort.
>> A conflict triggers strong emotions and it can lead to hurt feelings, disappointment and discomfort.
It will adversely affect the relationships because as a conflict becomes deeper, you might cross the line to say words to hurt his/her feeling.
>> Did you mean: It will adversely affect the relationship because when a conflict becomes deeper, you might cross the line when you say words that will hurt his/her feelings.
>> OR: It will affect the relationship because when a conflict becomes worse, you might cross the line when you say some words that might hurt his/her feelings.
The emotional scar you received during the dispute might not be cured shortly and remain permanently.
>> Correct!
The feeling hurt could surface anytime again when your relationship is in trouble.
>> Did you mean: The hurt that you felt could surface anytime again when your relationship is in trouble.
>> OR: The hurt that you felt could be there again when you\'re in trouble.
But, a conflict is a part of life.
>> Correct!
>> OR: But undergoing a conflict is a part of our life.
The best way to deal with the situation is that you should control yourself not to humiliate others even when a conflict gets fierce.
>> Correct!
When you are in control of your emotions, you can communicate your opinion effectively.
>> Correct!
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