Are humans better at creation or destruction?

2017-12-15 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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It is not easy to answer about human being. I would like to approach this issues as a hospital worker, especially radiation therapist who treat cancer patients using radiation source. It has been developed a lot since it founded and it is still developing. If people stop to introduce new technology, many people in the world will be died. People believe that it will be completely cured and dream overcoming their disease. Radiation therapy is working very well when the treatment combine with other treatment like chemotherapy or hyperthermia. This is a medical discovery of human. I know that there are a lot of destruction caused by human. But I believe they can restore what they destroyed.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]!

Weekend is near! How are you going to spend your weekend? Whatever it is make sure that it is something productive and fun. Technology does give a good and a bad effect to our lives and nature. Humans have been guilty in exploiting our nature as the advancement of technology continuously increases. The good thing is that we make ways and solutions to cure the problem step by step.

Have a great day!

~Teacher Eunice


It is not easy to answer about human being.

>>Correct!
 I would like to approach this issues as a hospital worker, especially radiation therapist who treat cancer patients using radiation source.

>> I would like to approach this issue as a hospital worker, especially radiation therapists who treat cancer patients are using radiation source.
 It has been developed a lot since it founded and it is still developing.

>> It has been improved a lot since it was discovered and it is still continuously developing.
 If people stop to introduce new technology, many people in the world will be died.

>> If people will stop introducing new advance technologies, many people in the world will die.  

People believe that it will be completely cured and dream overcoming their disease.

>> People believe that overcoming their diseases and be completely cured is like a dream.
Radiation therapy is working very well when the treatment combine with other treatment like chemotherapy or hyperthermia.

>> Radiation therapy is working very well when the treatment is combined with other treatments like chemotherapy or hyperthermia. 
 This is a medical discovery of human.

>> Correct!
 I know that there are a lot of destruction caused by human.

>> I know that there are a lot of destructions caused by humans.

But I believe they can restore what they destroyed.

>> Correct!

>> OR: I believe that they can restore whatever they have destroyed.


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