Are older people actually wiser?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that all older people are not wiser. Older people don\'t become wiser people. When they try to be wiser in their life, they can be wiser. People have learned lots of things during life time. But, knowledge should change over time. The knowledge should be tools to solve current problems, it must change according to time or situations. A person who can change his knowledge to match with time or situations is wiser person.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon [이름]ny! :)
Thank you for diligently writing this essay.
Thank you for diligently writing this essay.
It is true that age doesn\'t always equal to knowledge.
In my opinion, experience is equal to knowledge.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great on a Monday.
See you again in class later. ^^
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great on a Monday.
See you again in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry
>> CORRECT!
Older people don\'t become wiser people.
>> CORRECT!
When they try to be wiser in their life, they can be wiser.
>> When they try to be wiser in their lives, they can be wiser.
People have learned lots of things during life time.
>> People learn a lot of things during their lifetime.
But, knowledge should change over time.
>> CORRECT!
The knowledge should be tools to solve current problems, it must change according to time or situations.
>> The knowledge should be tools to solve current problems and it must change according to the time or situations.
A person who can change his knowledge to match with time or situations is wiser person.
>> A person who can change his knowledge to match with the time or situations is the wiser person.
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