Are people more equal under socialism? Why?
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While they are more equal in some respects, they are inequal in other respect when it comes the aims of individualism. Socialism is designed to prevent countries from happening to have fraud and corruption. Here in the South Korea with this kind of atmosphere, when I see some irritaing issues related to political and economical ones, sometimes I would prefer socialism adopting the causes of toehr social movements , such as environmentalism, feminism and progressivism.
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While they are more equal in some respects, they are inequal in other respect when it comes the aims of individualism.
>> While they are more equal in some respects, there is a disparity on some points, especially when it comes to the aims of individualism.
Socialism is designed to prevent countries from happening to have fraud and corruption.
>> Socialism is designed to prevent the occurrence of fraud and corruption in the country.
Here in the South Korea with this kind of atmosphere, when I see some irritaing issues related to political and economical ones, sometimes I would prefer socialism adopting the causes of toehr social movements , such as environmentalism, feminism and progressivism.
>> With this kind of atmosphere here in South Korea, when I see some irritating issues related to politics and economics, I would sometimes prefer socialism and consider adopting the causes of other social movements, such as environmentalism, feminism, and progressivism.
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