Are people more likely to be happy if they focus on goals other than their own happiness?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that focusing their goals are more happier than focusing their own happiness.
People must have to set a goal. Sometimes it is about their work or even their personal things. They do their best because they have their own specific goals. If people don't have any goal, they do not try to hard to everything. They aren't able to develop themselves. They just stay now, because there are no reasons to do their best.
However, If we set a specific goals. it lead us to do our best. Sometimes it will very hard to achieve and frustrated, but when they finally achieve their goal. That is the most happiest things in their life.
Otherwise, if they only concentrate their own happiness, they try to safe from all. We can't success without taking any risk.
These are the reasons why I think people must have to set a goal to became happy.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
A great Monday to you! ^^
As a kid, I was always told by my parents to \"keep my eyes on the prize\".
I didn\'t understand why I can\'t play all the time like the other kids; why I can\'t watch TV the whole day on weekends; why I have to read a lot more and why I have to study hard in order to be part of the so-called \"honor-roll\".
I hated being locked up inside the house to study and I envied most of my schoolmates.
But I studied hard and did what was expected of me.
I was given the chance to play but only for a limited time.
In my parents\' opinion, everything has its time. There\'s a time to play and a time to study.
When I got older, I started to appreciate the kind of training and upbringing my parents gave me.
If it weren\'t for it, I wouln\'t learn how to work hard and achieve my goals.
I would have preferred to stay in my comfort zone and procrastinate.
Happiness is a very general term. For me, being happy is when you achieve your set goals.
I am happy because I get fulfillment out of it.
Setting goals is a fundamental component to long-term success.
The basic reason for this is that you can\'t get where you are trying to until you clearly define where that is.
A person with no goal is a person with no direction.
Goals help a person focus and allocate his time and resources efficiently.
It can keep a person motivated whenever he feels like giving up at life.
Thank you for this composition [이름]. I was once again reminded to \"keep my eyes on the prize.\"
I hope you keep your eyes on the prize as well.
Do well not only at work but at life as well.
Remember that you only get one shot at life so you might want to make the best out of it.
I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
Take care and God bless!
~Teacher Charry (^^,)
I think that focusing their goals are more happier than focusing their own happiness.
>> I think focusing on your goals will make you happier rather than focusing on what makes you happy alone.
People must have to set a goal.
>> People must set a goal.
OR >> People have to set a goal.
Sometimes it is about their work or even their personal things.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: Sometimes, people become happy when they fulfill their goals at work or goals in life.
They do their best because they have their own specific goals.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They strive hard because they have their own specific goals to meet.
If people don\'t have any goal, they do not try to hard to everything.
>> When people don\'t have any goal, they don\'t do their best in doing things.
They aren\'t able to develop themselves.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They aren\'t able to improve their skills or abilities.
They just stay now, because there are no reasons to do their best.>> They just stay as they are, because they don\'t have any reasons to do their best.However, If we set a specific goals. it lead us to do our best.
>> However, If we set specific goals, these goals will give us the drive to do our best.
Sometimes it will very hard to achieve and frustrated, but when they finally achieve their goal.
>> Sometimes, these goals are very difficult to achieve and could sometimes leave us frustrated. However, the moment that we achieve them, it gives us a sense of fulfillment.
That is the most happiest things in their life.
>> That is the happiest thing that could happen in a person\'s life.Otherwise, if they only concentrate their own happiness, they try to safe from all.
>> If people only concentrate on their own happiness, they will only try to stay in their comfort zones and won\'t try anything new.
We can\'t success without taking any risk.
>> We can\'t attain success without taking any risk.These are the reasons why I think people must have to set a goal to became happy.
>> These are the reasons why I think people must set a goal to become happy.
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