Are policemen powerful in your country? Why or why not?

2023-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Demi

학생이 쓴 원문

The police in my country have adequate power to enforce their duties and I know their authority is stipulated in a law. Isn’t it natural that enforcement has corresponding power to its mission committed by the public no matter what reasons for it? Anyway, I feel the police have power for the following reasons. First, I feel the crimes in my society have been always under control, which is the attributable to powerful enforcement of the police in my country. Second, we don’t worry about walking along the street at late night. I thought all countries across the world were like my country. However, after finding out that this is not the case for other countries, I have felt proud of my country’s security. On top of that, story police force has contributed to keeping us the a country where ammunition and weapons are banned. By the way, I like the Korean police because they are not into power over society but have been trying to make their images more friendly to the public.

강사 첨삭

Hello Steve,
Thank you for doing your homework. I kind of envy the police officers you have in Korea. Anyway, great job :) 
~ T. Demi ^^
The police in my country have adequate power to enforce their duties and I know their authority is stipulated in a law. 
>>CORRECT!
OR>> The police in my country have sufficient power to carry out their duties, and I understand that their power is defined by a specific law.
Isn’t it natural that enforcement has corresponding power to its mission committed by the public no matter what reasons for it?
>> CORRECT!
Anyway, I feel the police have power for the following reasons.
>>CORRECT!
OR>> Anyway, I feel the police hold significant power, and there are several reasons to support this assertion.
First, I feel the crimes in my society have been always under control, which is the attributable to powerful enforcement of the police in my country. 
>>CORRECT!
OR>> First, I feel the crimes in my society have been consistently under control, which is the attributable to robust enforcement of the police in my country. 
Second, we don’t worry about walking along the street at late night.
>> Second, we don’t worry about walking along the street late at night.
I thought all countries across the world were like my country.
>>CORRECT!
However, after finding out that this is not the case for other countries, I have felt proud of my country’s security.
>> CORRECT!
On top of that, story police force has contributed to keeping us the a country where ammunition and weapons are banned. 
>> CORRECT!
By the way, I like the Korean police because they are not into power over society but have been trying to make their images more friendly to the public.
>> CORRECT!
OR>> By the way, I like the Korean police because they are making efforts to improve their public image by prioritizing their relationship with society over exerting power.

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