Are smartphones and computers making children unhealthy, distracted, and irritable? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
I\'m not sure about those things, but I know that it is not that good at our health.
The organs that most damaged are our eyes.
There is no any official research about this, but I know that it can actually heart our eyes.
And I think eyes are one of the most important organs for us.
Because of this reason, I think we need to control our phone or computer habits by ourselves.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
You are totally right. The eyes could be the most affected by our usage of gadgets. Anyway, thanks for sharing your input. See you next week! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>CORRECT!
The organs that most damaged are our eyes.
The organs that most damaged are our eyes.
>>The organs that are most damaged are our eyes.
There is no any official research about this, but I know that it can actually heart our eyes.
There is no any official research about this, but I know that it can actually heart our eyes.
>>There is no any official research about this, but I know that it can actually hurt our eyes.
And I think eyes are one of the most important organs for us.
And I think eyes are one of the most important organs for us.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this reason, I think we need to control our phone or computer habits by ourselves.
Because of this reason, I think we need to control our phone or computer habits by ourselves.
>>CORRECT!
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