Are social networking sites changing our daily behavior?

2022-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Yes, I think social networking sites are changing our daliy behavior. Because all my friends were doing instagram, I also wanted to upload my pictures and share my daliy routine, so I made my Instagram ID. But as soon as I installed Instagram and uploaded my selfee I didn\'t do anything, because I cared too much about its notifications and likes.

강사 첨삭

Hi Sally!🌸
Thank you for doing your homework today. I know that you are busy for your midterm exam but you gave your time for it. I really appreciate it a lot. Anyway, I hope you can also enjoy your Instagram account if you have time. ^^
Good night!
Always, 
Kelly💜
Yes, I think social networking sites are changing our daliy behavior. 
>> Yes, I think social networking sites are changing our daily behavior.  
Because all my friends were doing instagram, 
>> Because all my friends were doing Instagram.
I also wanted to upload my pictures and share my daliy routine, so I made my Instagram ID. 
>> I also wanted to upload my pictures and share my daily routine, so I made my Instagram ID. 
But as soon as I installed Instagram and uploaded my selfee I didn\'t do anything, because I cared too much about its notifications and likes.
>> But as soon as I installed Instagram and uploaded my selfie I didn\'t do anything, because I cared too much about its notifications and likes.

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