Are social networking sites good for our society?
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Hi, [이름]-Li!
I would like to thank you for diligently writing an essay tonight.
I agree that social networking sites are useful.
But there are times when I think that they\'re not good because they sometimes have violent or sexual contents that are not very suitable with young people (like me. LOL)
Anyhow, I hope you\'re having a beautiful evening with your loved ones.
See you again tomorrow. ^^
~Charry
social networking sites are good for us.
>> Social networking sites are good for us.
first, we can communicate with other many people without contacting.
>> First, we can communicate with other people without having a close contact with them.
and, could talk with friend directly who lives in another country.
>> In addition, I could talk with a friend who lives in another country directly.
OR >> In addition, I could directly talk with a friend who lives in another country.
also, study English and other language through various root.
>> [Do you mean]: Also, studying English and other languages through various routes is possible.
even, we don\'t need to go. but we can have provided education from native speakers.
>> We don\'t even need to go to those places. We can have education from native speakers through social media.
there are lots of good things using social networking.
>> There are lots of good things that we can do using social networking sites.
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