Are songs significant in life? Why?
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강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]. Thank you for sending this in. Music is indeed necessary. It is also one of the ways we can express and convey our emotions, through music.
- T. Beth
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Yes, Muisic can create various atmosphere such as exciting, romantic, teaceful, calm.
>>> Yes, music can create various atmosphere such as exciting, romantic, peaceful, and calm.
So when people want to change atmosphere, they turn on the music.
>>> So when people want to change the atmosphere, they turn on the music.
And I often listen to music, when I want to relieve stress.
>>> CORRECT.
That give me a comfort.
>>> That gives me comfort.
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