Are the best toys consisted of 90% of child and 10% of toys?
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The toys need a child’s imagination to come to life, but electronic toys often do all the work themselves. When a toy does too much, the child just watches instead of creating the fun. The best play happens when the child is the boss, not the toy.
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Jean~~
Are the best toys consisted of 90% of child and 10% of toys?
The toys need a child’s imagination to come to life, but electronic toys often do all the work themselves.
>>> OR: Toys come alive through a child’s imagination, but electronic toys often take over the play.
When a toy does too much, the child just watches instead of creating the fun.
>>> OR: If a toy does everything, the child becomes a spectator rather than the creator of fun.
The best play happens when the child is the boss, not the toy.
>>> OR: The most meaningful play occurs when the child directs the fun, not when the toy dictates it.
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