Are there any specific activities or events in your community that you look forward to during the Ne
학생이 쓴 원문
Our community has temples and mountains with a long history.
It\'s also a comfortable place that residents often visit.
In the new year, the mountains are crowded with people who came to make wishes while watching the sunrise.
Also, when the New Year comes, temples work to build towers with small stones to make their New Year\'s wishes.
And many people make and share ricecake soup, which is also expected to be a year older in Korea because of the traditional custom of eating ricecake soup on New Year.
강사 첨삭
Good morning, Ji [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your New Year activities. I hope you had a great one!
Our community has temples and mountains with a long history.>> Correct
It\'s also a comfortable place that residents often visit.
It\'s also a comfortable place that residents often visit.
>> Correct
In the new year, the mountains are crowded with people who came to make wishes while watching the sunrise.
In the new year, the mountains are crowded with people who came to make wishes while watching the sunrise.
>> Correct
Also, when the New Year comes, temples work to build towers with small stones to make their New Year\'s wishes.
Also, when the New Year comes, temples work to build towers with small stones to make their New Year\'s wishes.
>> Correct
And many people make and share ricecake soup, which is also expected to be a year older in Korea because of the traditional custom of eating ricecake soup on New Year.
And many people make and share ricecake soup, which is also expected to be a year older in Korea because of the traditional custom of eating ricecake soup on New Year.
>> And many people make
and share rice cake soup, which is also expected to add a year to one\'s age in
Korea due to the traditional custom of eating rice cake soup on New Year.
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