Are there climate changes apparent in your country?
학생이 쓴 원문
Absolutely yes! Climate change is going currently.
First, my country have absolute four season. March, April, and May are spring, June, July, and August are summer, September, October, and November are fall, and December, January, and February are winter. It was very clear so we could predict the weather and prepare our attire.
But, recently, summer, winter become longer and spring, fall become shorter than ever. Also, abnormal temperature is appeared sometime. For example, we saw the snow in March last year. I think it is very clear phenomenon of climate change.
Second, particulate matter is very serious problem last spring in Korea. It is worse than ever. Now it is essential to wear a mask to protect our body from particulate matter. It have been before but it is not big problem because we are affect a little. Nowadays, direction of wind is changed opposite of because of climate change. So, we are affect more.
Thus, we can respond climate change by reducing greenhouse gas.
강사 첨삭
Hello Se [이름]!
Here are the corrections.
First, my country have absolute four season. March, April, and May are spring, June, July, and August are summer, September, October, and November are fall, and December, January, and February are winter.
>>First, my country have absolute four seasons. March, April, and May are the spring months; June, July, and August are summer; September, October, and November are fall; December, January, and February are the winter months.
It was very clear so we could predict the weather and prepare our attire. But, recently, summer, winter become longer and spring, fall become shorter than ever.
>>It was very clear, so we could predict the weather and prepare our attires. But, recently, summer and winter become longer and spring and fall become shorter than ever.
Also, abnormal temperature is appeared sometime. For example, we saw the snow in March last year. I think it is very clear phenomenon of climate change.
>>Also, abnormal temperature happens sometimes. For example, we saw the snow in March last year. I think it is a very clear phenomenon of climate change.
Second, particulate matter is very serious problem last spring in Korea. It is worse than ever. Now it is essential to wear a mask to protect our body from particulate matter.
>>Second, particulate matters become a very serious problem last spring in Korea. It is worse than ever. Now, it is essential to wear a mask to protect our body from particulate matter.
It have been before but it is not big problem because we are affect a little. Nowadays, direction of wind is changed opposite of because of climate change. So, we are affect more.
>> It has been experienced before, but it is not a big problem because we are only affected a little. Nowadays, direction of the wind has changed to the opposite because of climate change. So, we are much affected.
Thus, we can respond climate change by reducing greenhouse gas.
>>Thus, we can respond to climate change by reducing greenhouse gas.
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