Are there gender role biased issues in your country? What are they?
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Although, I’m not sure whether it is relevant to the gender role biased issue or not, there has been a strong controversy in Korea over whether it is right for men who are drifted and serve in the military for the country as required by the constitution to be given academic credits for their service. The credits will help them obtain their bachelor degrees. A long time ago, men who served in the military were given additional points when they took an exam to be civil servants. The scheme has been originally designed by the defense ministry to make a compensation for the compulsory military service. However, female activists have taken the case to the court, insisting on equal opportunity for men and women.After a series of in-depth discussion, the court ruled it in favor of the plaintiff. The Ministry has sought other ways to compensate without breaching the EO regulations and has recently revealed the plan of giving credits. But the plan has been also receiving strong opposition.
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What a great composition Sir [이름]!
You imparted your thoughts in an incredible manner. Great! Keep it up!
Good thing the women really fought for their right.These days, there are still gender role biased issues but we have to know what it right from wrong.
I can say that there are a lot of women who can do the job of men but of course there are still limitations.
We should be proud of the people who are doing their best at work.
Teacher Nina
Although, I’m not sure whether it is relevant to the gender role biased issue or not, there has been a strong controversy in Korea over whether it is right for men who are drifted and serve in the military for the country as required by the constitution to be given academic credits for their service.
>> Correct
>> OR: Although, I’m not sure whether it is relevant to the gender role biased issue or not. There has been a strong controversy in Korea over, whether it is right for men who are drifted and serve in the military for the country as required by the constitution to be given academic credits for their service.
The credits will help them obtain their bachelor degrees.
>> The credits will help them obtain their bachelor degree.
A long time ago, men who served in the military were given additional points when they took an exam to be civil servants.
>> Correct
The scheme has been originally designed by the defense ministry to make a compensation for the compulsory military service.
>> Correct
However, female activists have taken the case to the court, insisting on equal opportunity for men and women.
>> Correct
After a series of in-depth discussion, the court ruled it in favor of the plaintiff.
>> Correct
The Ministry has sought other ways to compensate without breaching the EO regulations and has recently revealed the plan of giving credits.
>> Correct
But the plan has been also receiving strong opposition.
>> Correct
>> OR: But the plan has been also receiving protests.
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