Are there really diseases that you think humans could totally get rid of if we tried?
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I think that humans can\\\'t get rid of all diseases.
First, humans are very small being and the universe is very big as we can\\\'t imagine.
For a long time, humans have achieved many things like the law of gravity, theory of relativity, and Hubble\\\'s law.
This theory can explain phenomenon that occurs in Earth but, we also have many things to explain yet.
Despite we spent a lot of time, there are many things which we want to know than we already know.
Also, new ones can always occur.
Humans solved many diseases like smallpox, tuberculosis, and so on.
So, I believe that humans can solve other diseases.
However, new diseases have occurred continuously.
Recently, Middle East Respiratory Syndrome(MERS) issued in Korea.
It damaged badly but occurred from 2012. In other wise, new disease occurred until recently.
Thus, humans can\\\'t solve all diseases, but I wish that they could solve unlike what I thought.
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Hello, Se [이름]!
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I think that humans can\\\'t get rid of all diseases. First, humans are very small being and the universe is very big as we can\\\'t imagine.
>>I think that humans can\'t get rid of all diseases. First, humans are very small being and the universe is very big that we can\'t imagine.
For a long time, humans have achieved many things like the law of gravity, theory of relativity, and Hubble\\\'s law. This theory can explain phenomenon that occurs in Earth but, we also have many things to explain yet.
>>For a long time, humans have discovered many things like the law of gravity, theory of relativity, and Hubble\'s law. This theory can explain phenomenon that occurs in Earth but, we also have many things to explain yet.
Despite we spent a lot of time, there are many things which we want to know than we already know. Also, new ones can always occur.
>>Despite of spending a lot of time, there are many things we want to know than what we already knew. Also, new ones can always occur.
Humans solved many diseases like smallpox, tuberculosis, and so on. So, I believe that humans can solve other diseases.
>>Correct!
However, new diseases have occurred continuously. Recently, Middle East Respiratory Syndrome(MERS) issued in Korea.
>>However, new diseases have occurred continuously. Recently, Middle East Respiratory Syndrome(MERS) was issued in Korea.
It damaged badly but occurred from 2012. In other wise, new disease occurred until recently. Thus, humans can\\\'t solve all diseases, but I wish that they could solve unlike what I thought.
>>It damaged badly and it occurred from 2012. On the other hand, new diseases occurred recently. Thus, humans can\'t solve all diseases, but I wish that they could solve them.
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