Are TV shows getting better or worse?
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There are many TV programs nowadays in Korea. Some people might hold the idea that these TV shows are not good. However, I am certain that TV shows these days are getting better in many respects.
In the first place, the format of show has been diverse. Long time ago, most of the shows had similar form and only a few famous people were appeared in those TV shows. Because of this, viewer was easily sick and tired of the shows. But unlike the past, there are many TV shows which features a baby and even an animal. It is very fresh and gets viewer's attention.
In the second place, TV show is not only entertain program but also informative and instructive one. The Infinite Challenge, the famous TV show in Korean, can be example of this. It is a TV show but it continues trying to provide the public with informative and instructive knowledge. People can enjoy and learn a lesson while watching it.
Due to the two reasons above, I believe that TV shows are getting better in Korea.
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Good morning Miss [이름]. Thank you for doing your hoemwork despite your tough schedule. Thank you for sharing your ideas about our topic. I agree with you that TV has expanded the potential for education for the average worldwide citizen. See you in class!
~Kelly^^
There are many TV programs nowadays in Korea.
>> Nowadays, there are many TV programs in Korea.
Some people might hold the idea that these TV shows are not good.
>> Correct.
However, I am certain that TV shows these days are getting better in many respects.
>> Correct.In the first place, the format of show has been diverse.
>> Firstly, the format of shows have been diverse.
Long time ago, most of the shows had similar form and only a few famous people were appeared in those TV shows.
>> Long time ago, most of the shows had similar concepts and only a few famous people appeared in those TV shows.
Because of this, viewer was easily sick and tired of the shows.
>> Because of this, viewers got sick and tired of those shows easily.
But unlike the past, there are many TV shows which features a baby and even an animal.
>> But unlike in the past, there are many TV shows which features a baby and even an animal nowadays.
It is very fresh and gets viewer\'s attention.
>> It is very fresh and gets viewers attention.In the second place, TV show is not only entertain program but also informative and instructive one.
>> Secondly, a TV show is not only entertaining but also informative and instructive.
The Infinite Challenge, the famous TV show in Korean, can be example of this.
>> The Infinite Challenge, a famous TV show in Korea, is a great example of this.
It is a TV show but it continues trying to provide the public with informative and instructive knowledge.
>> It is a TV show that continues to provide the public with informative and instructive knowledge.
People can enjoy and learn a lesson while watching it.
>> Correct.Due to the two reasons above, I believe that TV shows are getting better in Korea.
>> Correct.
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