Are video games better for you than watching TV?
학생이 쓴 원문
Personally I don`t like playing video game
So I watch TV when I need to relax or refresh .
Watching TV don`t need thinking and energy ,that is for looking only.
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Personally I don`t like playing video game
>> Personally, I don\'t like playing video games.
So I watch TV when I need to relax or refresh .
So I watch TV when I need to relax or refresh .
>> So I watch TV when I need to relax or I want to feel refreshed.
Watching TV don`t need thinking and energy ,that is for looking only.
Watching TV don`t need thinking and energy ,that is for looking only.
>> Watching TV doesn\'t need a lot of concentration and energy because all we need to do is watch.
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