Are we too dependent on computers? Why or why not?

2018-07-23 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Yes, We deeply depend on computer. Conputer is inseperable from workplace. In my case, I sit in front of computers all the time. Sometimes I feel very tired but I can't work without computer. So I try to avoid computers over the weekend. I worry about that teenager use computer too much. It's not good for eye health.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Jane!


You\'re right. We really depend on computers.

You can see computer shops everywhere.

I also worry about the vision of children and young people.

Have a nice day ahead!


_Teacher Dianne ^^


Yes, We deeply depend on computer.

>> Yes, we deeply depend on computers.
 Conputer is inseperable from workplace.

>> Computers are inseparable in our workplace.
 In my case, I sit in front of computers all the time.

>> correct

>> or: In my case, I sit in front of my computer all the time.
 Sometimes I feel very tired but I can\'t work without computer.

>> Sometimes I feel very tired, but I can\'t work without a computer.
 So I try to avoid computers over the weekend.

>> correct
 I worry about that teenager use computer too much. It\'s not good for eye health.

>> I worry about teenagers who use computers too much. It\'s not good for their eyes.

>>or: I worry about teenagers who use computers too much. It\'s not good for the health of their eyes.

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