Are we too dependent on computers? Why or why not?
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Hi, Jane!
You\'re right. We really depend on computers.
You can see computer shops everywhere.
I also worry about the vision of children and young people.
Have a nice day ahead!
_Teacher Dianne ^^
Yes, We deeply depend on computer.
>> Yes, we deeply depend on computers.
Conputer is inseperable from workplace.
>> Computers are inseparable in our workplace.
In my case, I sit in front of computers all the time.
>> correct
>> or: In my case, I sit in front of my computer all the time.
Sometimes I feel very tired but I can\'t work without computer.
>> Sometimes I feel very tired, but I can\'t work without a computer.
So I try to avoid computers over the weekend.
>> correct
I worry about that teenager use computer too much. It\'s not good for eye health.
>> I worry about teenagers who use computers too much. It\'s not good for their eyes.
>>or: I worry about teenagers who use computers too much. It\'s not good for the health of their eyes.
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