Are you a fan of the Olympics?
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I like sports but I don’t like the Olympics because I think the Olympics spirt is harmed now.
>>I like sports but I don’t like the Olympics because I think the Olympics spirit is harmed now.
Olympic spirit is to contribute to peace of world and advance from limit of oneself through sports.
>> Olympic spirit is to contribute peace to the world and advance from limit of oneself through sports.
However, the Olympics changed now for only winning the game.
>>CORRECT!
Some players do doping to win the game and also, some referees judge unfair for their benefits.
>>CORRECT!
Furthermore, I felt the International Olympic Committee(IOC) purse money.
>>CORRECT!
Nevertheless, the Olympics are still big festival for the world.
>>CORRECT!
Many people are enjoying sports games.
>>CORRECT!
It make me happy, exciting or sad.
>>It makes me happy, excited or sad.
It still work to gather people’s mind as one.
>> It still works to gather people’s mind as one.
Thus, I wish the Olympics will recover the original spirit.
>>CORRECT!
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