Are you a healthy person? How often do you get sick?
학생이 쓴 원문
I was proud tohave been my healthy untill last year.
But I still go to the hospital once a week
My immune system has weakened so blood bessels had bursts in late winter last year
I got a lots of shots for three months and ate Chinese medicine
From then I haven\'t recover my healthy
Actually I really really like drink but I stop to drink and sometimes drink a bit
So I\'ll do take some multivitamins and have a fresh foods.
강사 첨삭
Thank you [이름], you did a very good job in doing your homework. You just have to be careful on your punctuation marks. Continue practicing your writing skills. Keep it up!^_^
I was proud tohave been my healthy untill last year.
>>> I was proud of my health until last year.
But I still go to the hospital once a week
>>> But I still go to the hospital once a week.
My immune system has weakened so blood bessels had bursts in late winter last year
My immune system has weakened so blood bessels had bursts in late winter last year
>>> My immune system weakened, so my blood vessels burst late winter last year.
I got a lots of shots for three months and ate Chinese medicine
I got a lots of shots for three months and ate Chinese medicine
>>> I got a lot of shots for three months and took Chinese medicine.
From then I haven\'t recover my healthy
From then I haven\'t recover my healthy
>>> From then on, I haven\'t recover my good health.
Actually I really really like drink but I stop to drink and sometimes drink a bit
Actually I really really like drink but I stop to drink and sometimes drink a bit
>>> Actually, I really like drinking alcohol but I stopped to drink and sometimes I drink a little bit.
So I\'ll do take some multivitamins and have a fresh foods.
So I\'ll do take some multivitamins and have a fresh foods.
>>> So, I\'m taking some multivitamins and eating fresh food.
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