Are you good with money?
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As an entry-level worker, I am always assured that self-development should be a significant motivation for work. However, as you know, I am no longer motivated at the workplace. The work progress mainly derives from responsibility and salary. I usually joke that I am destined to work from a consumption pattern. Usually, I relieve stress from purchasing goods. This habit indicates that I am not good with money. To excuse me, I primarily relied on short-term savings because the nature of my previous work did not allow me to invest in any market from conflict of interest. Back then, I mostly parked my money in the bank account, while others had high profits from stock investments and accumulated wealth for early retirement. It does not indicate that I did not try. However, it was too late because the recent financial market is suffering from increased interest rates to tackle inflation. Therefore, I am determined to have late retirement as possible and work diligently as far as I can.
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Thanks for this as well Aciel!
As an entry-level worker, I am always assured that self-development should be a significant motivation for work.
>>> correct
However, as you know, I am no longer motivated at the workplace.
>>> correct
The work progress mainly derives from responsibility and salary.
>>> correct
I usually joke that I am destined to work from a consumption pattern.
>>> correct
Usually, I relieve stress from purchasing goods.
>>> correct
This habit indicates that I am not good with money.
>>> correct
To excuse me, I primarily relied on short-term savings because the nature of my previous work did not allow me to invest in any market from conflict of interest.
>>> OR: To excuse myself, I primarily relied on short-term savings because the nature of my previous work did not allow me to invest in any market due to conflict of interest.
Back then, I mostly parked my money in the bank account, while others had high profits from stock investments and accumulated wealth for early retirement.
>>> Back then, I mostly kept my money in the bank account, while others had high profits from stock investments and accumulated wealth for early retirement.
It does not indicate that I did not try.
>>> correct
However, it was too late because the recent financial market is suffering from increased interest rates to tackle inflation.
>>> correct
Therefore, I am determined to have late retirement as possible and work diligently as far as I can.
>>> correct
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