Are you happy with the state of your finances or do you always need to borrow from the bank or from
학생이 쓴 원문
.So so. I don\'t have a job.I just work part-time job.
So I can\'t borrow money.
First I will go to the University.because If i graduated
I get a chance to workplace better than now.
I try to study effort every day.I have not studied until this time.but I can try it.
Get a job.buy a house
Just two things my plan is.
If I may get those.I feel happy.
강사 첨삭
Hello JO!
I admire your simple yet challenging plans. After reading your homework today, I see you as a simple man who loves simple things in life.
I wish you all the best! YOU CAN DO IT! I know you\'re working hard for it at the moment.
In Korea, life is complicated. Commodities are really expensive comparing to other countries, and getting a well-paid job is quiet difficult.
I am also scared for these reasons. I am planning to come to Korea and live there next year. But, I am scared that Koreans might discriminate me because of my nationality.
And, maybe Koreans don\'t hire Filipinos no matter how good they are because of racial discrimination. I wish I was wrong!
Here are the corrections.
I don\'t have a job.I just work part-time job.
>> I don\'t have a job. I just work part-time job.
So I can\'t borrow money.
>> So, I can\'t borrow money.
First I will go to the University.because If i graduated I get a chance to workplace better than now.
>> First, I will go to the university because if I graduate, I will get a chance to work in a better place .
I try to study effort every day.I have not studied until this time.but I can try it.
>> I try to study with all my effort every day. I have not studied until this time, but I can try.
Get a job.buy a house
>> Get a job. Buy a house.
Just two things my plan is.
>> These are just my plans.
If I may get those.I feel happy.
>> If I get those. I will feel happy.
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