Are you health conscious?

2018-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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As you know I am a heavy smoker, you might think I am not health-conscious. But I have been quite health-conscious. I have lived alone since 2004, so it was the problem having a healthy meal every time. I used to have a meal at the restaurant and I realized that I had to cook the food for me because I felt that I became unhealthy. In regard to health problem, I always go to the hospital every time that I feel uncomfortable and take a medication before my symptom is getting worse. I think I have a little bit hypochondria. There are a lot of information about health problem in the web site, so we can search our problem through the internet and get the solution form it, even though it is not the truth which is proved by doctors. Although I know the fact that I mentioned above, I also have tried to find the information about my symptom and have been worrying about my health because most posting in the web page usually mention the worst situation and it show me the extreme cases.

강사 첨삭

This is explicit, Sir [이름]!

It is vital to keep track of our health, but if we already overreact to any simple sickness that we experience on a daily basis then we can assess that as hypochondria. We should also debunk self-medication to avoid risks to our health. Your ideas were exceptional! Write more..


~Teacher Eunice 


As you know I am a heavy smoker, you might think I am not health-conscious.

>>> As you know I am a heavy smoker, and you might think that I am not health-conscious.
But I have been quite health-conscious.
>>>
But, I have been quite health-conscious nowadays.   

I have lived alone since 2004, so it was the problem having a healthy meal every time.

>>> I have lived alone since 2004, so I had a problem of having a healthy meal every time.  

I used to have a meal at the restaurant and I realized that I had to cook the food for me because I felt that I became unhealthy. 

>>> I used to have meals at the restaurant, and I realized that I had to cook food for me because I felt that I became unhealthy. 

In regard to health problem, I always go to the hospital every time that I feel uncomfortable and take a medication before my symptom is getting worse.
>>> R
egarding health problem, I always go to the hospital every time I feel uncomfortable and take a medication before my symptom get worse.

I think I have a little bit hypochondria. 

>>> I think I have hypochondria. 

There are a lot of information about health problem in the web site, so we can search our problem through the internet and get the solution form it, even though it is not the truth which is proved by doctors. 

>>> There are a lot of information about health problems on the websites, so we can search our problem through internet and get the solution from it, even though it is not approved by doctors. 

Although I know the fact that I mentioned above, I also have tried to find the information about my symptom and have been worrying about my health because most posting in the web page usually mention the worst situation and it show me the extreme cases.

>>> Although, I know the facts I have mentioned above, I also tried finding information about my symptom.

>>> I have been worrying about my health because most posts on the web page usually mention the worst situation, and extreme cases.

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