Are you or would you like to be vegetarian?

2019-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Melody

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I’m not a vegetarian. However, I agree with the idea of being a vegetarian, and understand why we need to be it. Actually we destroy our environment to raise the amount of livestock that we consume a lot. We kill and eat so much meat, even too much unconsciously. If we become a little more conscious of our health and environment, we might be able to diminish our meat consummation. For me, as I’m getting older, the less I like eating meat. So, fortunately, I’m getting used to eating meat rarely. Of course, I can’t refuse or avoid eating it in the situation that I can’t help it, but now at least I don’t buy meat or look for eating it by myself. I just try to eat less and less of them these days.

강사 첨삭

1. I’m not a vegetarian.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I\'m not a vegan.


2. However, I agree with the idea of being a vegetarian, and understand why we need to be it.

>>However, I agree with the idea of being a vegetarian and I understand why we need to be one.


3. Actually we destroy our environment to raise the amount of livestock that we consume a lot.

>>Actually, we destroy our environment to raise the amount of livestock that we need and that we consume a lot.


4. We kill and eat so much meat, even too much unconsciously.

>>We kill animals and eat so much meat, even too much unconsciously.


5. If we become a little more conscious of our health and environment, we might be able to diminish our meat consummation.

>>If we become a little more conscious of our health and environment, we might be able to diminish our meat consumption.

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6. For me, as I’m getting older, the less I like eating meat.

>>CORRECT

OR>>For me, as I’m getting older, the less I prefer eating meat.


7. So, fortunately, I’m getting used to eating meat rarely.

>>CORRECT

OR>>So, fortunately, I’m getting used to eating a little meat .


8. Of course, I can’t refuse or avoid eating it in the situation that I can’t help it, but now at least I don’t buy meat or look for eating it by myself.

>>Of course, I can’t refuse or avoid eating it in some situations, but now at least I don’t buy meat or at least crave for it.


9. I just try to eat less and less of them these days.

>>I just try to eat less and less of it these days.



I couldn\'t be a vegan, too.

But I\'m more fond of eating fruits and vegetable salads these days.

Keep eating healthy food. ^^

Very good sentences.


-T. Melody ^^

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