Are you pro-life, or pro-choice? Why, and how do you see the opposing viewpoint?

2015-01-29 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I am a bit standing on the side pro-choice although I respect the fact that life is precious and it should be protected at any cost. Life is important more than anything else. That’s why it should be decided discreetly whether to have a baby or not. Thinking about the future of those who are abandoned or abused by their biological parents, we cannot simply say that once someone is pregnant, she must deliver a baby regardless of her will or difficult situations. Once they decide to give a birth to a baby, they have to hold themselves accountable for raising their baby with care and love. In addition, our society also should take a responsibility for the issue. We should have a system like a nursing facility and a sound adoption program so that the babies abandoned by their parents could grow and live a decent life without their basic human rights infringed. We should not leave the matter to an individual because it is a social issue as well. Without having such social systems in place,

강사 첨삭

I absolutely agree with you, Sir [이름].

Parents should be really responsible in raising their kids.

If there will be a nursing facility and a sound adoption program, I am sure that the lives of the babies will be really great.

They will be provided with a lot of things.

Hopefully this will happen in the future.

Teacher Nina


I am a bit standing on the side pro-choice although I respect the fact that life is precious and it should be protected at any cost.

>> Correct

>> Did you mean: I am a bit in favor of pro-choice although I respect the fact that life is previous and it should be protected at any cost.

Life is important more than anything else.

>> Correct

That’s why it should be decided discreetly whether to have a baby or not.

>> Correct

Thinking about the future of those who are abandoned or abused by their biological parents, we cannot simply say that once someone is pregnant, she must deliver a baby regardless of her will or difficult situations.

>> Correct

>> When we think  about the future of those who are abandoned or abused by their biological parents, we cannot simply say that once someone is pregnant, she must deliver a baby regardless of her will or difficult situations.

Once they decide to give a birth to a baby, they have to hold themselves accountable for raising their baby with care and love.

>> Once they decide to give birth to a baby, they have to hold themselves accountable for raising him/ her with care and love.

>> Once they decide to give birth to a baby,  they should be responsible in raising him/ her with full of love.

In addition, our society also should take a responsibility for the issue.

>> In addition, our society should take responsibility for the issue.

>> In addition, our society is also responsible about the issue.

We should have a system like a nursing facility and a sound adoption program so that the babies abandoned by their parents could grow and live a decent life without their basic human rights infringed.

>> We should have a system like a nursing facility and a sound adoption program so that the babies who were abandoned by their parents could grow and live a decent life without their basic human rights infringed.

We should not leave the matter to an individual because it is a social issue as well.

>> Correct

Without having such social systems in place,

>> To be continued ^^

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