Army
학생이 쓴 원문
It\'s really personal opinion.
I think it\'s best not to go if there\'s a way not to go to the army.
In Korea the men should go to army.
But if some men have way not go to he army, they should do it.
2 years it\'s so long time and time is so precious.
강사 첨삭
Hi Ann!
With the stories that my students usually tell me, I think that it is also not good for men to serve the military because of the abuse. There has been a lot of cases of bullying during their military training and it has cause a lot of trauma.
It\'s really personal opinion.
I think it\'s best not to go if there\'s a way not to go to the army.
In Korea the men should go to army.
But if some men have way not go to he army, they should do it.
2 years it\'s so long time and time is so precious.
>> This is my personal opinion.
I think it\'s best not to go if there\'s a way not to go to the army.
>> I think it is best for men to not go to the military.
In Korea the men should go to army.
>> In South Korea, men mandatorily needs to serve the army.
But if some men have way not go to he army, they should do it.
>> But if men had the choice whether to go or not, they will not go there.
2 years it\'s so long time and time is so precious.
>> 2 years is a long time an time is so precious.
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