Around my home
학생이 쓴 원문
I live in Gang-dong, which is the east side of Seoul. My town is in the boundary between Seoul and Gyung-gi province. Since it’s far away from the downtown, it’s neither noisy nor crowded. It has lots of parks and fresh air. However, since it’s far from the downtown, it’s not good for meeting my friends or going to university. It takes at least more than a hour to reach any place to do something special. In spite of these reasons, I like my town because I prefer atmosphere of calm and restfulness.
강사 첨삭
Hello dear!
Thank you for sharing something about where you live. I agree with you that it is better to live in a place where it is calm and quiet. Just feel free to write everyday in the composition because this also helps you improve your speaking and writing skills.
T.Dominic
I live in Gang-dong, which is the east side of Seoul.
>> I live in Gang-dong, which is in the east side of Seoul.
My town is in the boundary between Seoul and Gyung-gi province.
>>Correct!
Since it’s far away from the downtown, it’s neither noisy nor crowded.
>>Correct!
It has lots of parks and fresh air. However, since it’s far from the downtown, it’s not good for meeting my friends or going to university.
>> It has lots of parks and fresh air however, since it’s far from downtown, it’s not good for meeting my friends or going to university.
It takes at least more than a hour to reach any place to do something special.
>> It takes at least more than an hour to reach any place to do something special.
In spite of these reasons, I like my town because I prefer atmosphere of calm and restfulness.
>> In spite of these reasons, I like my town because I prefer the atmosphere because it makes me feel calm and rested.
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