Around the World for Free

One day, a girl doesn't want study and boring,, She wants travel all over the world! But, she doesn't have much money! Also, She is very young!!! She has great idea! First, she finds a big box. And prepared newspapers,foods,water,pen,some money! She puts newspapers in the box, so, It become more comfortable. She writes countries on the box with pen. And then,She hides into the box with foods,water, and some money. Clerks sees it and put into the airplane~! So, she can travel all over the world for free! If I really want to travel all over the world, I'll think this method!^^ And I envy her^^;;

Hi there Sarah!^^

Great composition!  

It is a brilliant idea to travel around the world for free. 

I\'ll keep this method in mind. 

It might come handy someday. ^^

The way you presented your idea will make any readers keep on reading your story.  

It just needs a little polishing. 

You are doing very well my dear. :p

Keep it up!^^

Have fun this weekend!

I\'ll see you on Monday.

~~T. Heidi_^-^_

One day, a girl doesn\'t want study and boring,,

>> One day, a girl didn\'t want to study and was very bored.
She wants travel all over the world!

>> She wanted to travel all over the world.

>> Or: She wants to travel around the world.

But, she doesn\'t have much money!

But she didn\'t have much money.

Also, She is very young!!!

>> She was also very young.
She has great idea! First, she finds a big box.

>> She had a great idea.  She looked for a big box.
And prepared newspapers,foods,water,pen,some money!

>> She prepared some newspapers, foods, water, pen and money.
She puts newspapers in the box, so, It become more comfortable.

>> She put the newspaper inside the box.  It became more comfortable.
She writes countries on the box with pen.

>> She wrote names of different countries on the box with a pen.
And then,She hides into the box with foods,water, and some money.

>> She hid in the box with food, water and some money.
Clerks sees it and put into the airplane~!

>> A clerk saw it  and put it in the airplane.
So, she can travel all over the world for free!

>> She travelled all around the world for free.
If I really want to travel all over the world, I\'ll think this method!^^

>> If I really want to travel all over the world.  I\'ll think of this method.
And I envy her^^;;

>>Correct! 

OR >>And I envy that girl.