Around the world more and more people today are living in urban areas. Why is this? What problems do
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Around the world more and more people today are living in urban areas.
The reason is when they are in urban, they can get a lot of benefits.
An urban has all the modern amenities but even wifi is not working in countryside.
But the more people come to city, the more countryside can’t be developed.
In the long run, any people wouldn’t live in undeveloped countryside.
Therefore, from now on It is needed to narrow the gap of the city and the countryside.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Around the world more and more people today are living in urban areas.
>>> Around the world more and more people are living in urban areas.
The reason is when they are in urban, they can get a lot of benefits.
The reason is when they are in urban, they can get a lot of benefits.
>>> CORRECT
An urban has all the modern amenities but even Wi-Fi is not working in countryside.
An urban has all the modern amenities but even Wi-Fi is not working in countryside.
>>> Urban areas have modern amenities but even Wi-Fi is not working in the countryside.
But the more people come to city, the more countryside can’t be developed.
But the more people come to city, the more countryside can’t be developed.
>>> CORRECT
In the long run, many people wouldn’t live in undeveloped countryside.
In the long run, many people wouldn’t live in undeveloped countryside.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, from now on It is needed to narrow the gap of the city and the countryside.
Therefore, from now on It is needed to narrow the gap of the city and the countryside.
>>> Therefore, from now on it is necessary to narrow the gap of the city and the countryside.
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