Art
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There are many ways to express our thoughts such as song, performance, book, art and so on. Actually, when I was really young, I couldn\'t know that people can feel and understand how the author felt when arts were made except songs. I mean, there are lyrics in songs so that it is easy to know their thinking by listening to them. But for performance and art, it is a bit hard to understand their purpose. Whenever I\'ve been to museum, it was really hard to even know what they want to express. But I\'m hoping I can improve my quality about appreciating arts in the future.
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1. There are many ways to express our thoughts such as song, performance, book, art and so on.
>>There are many ways to express our thoughts such as a song, a performance, a book, an art and so on.
2. Actually, when I was really young, I couldn\'t know that people can feel and understand how the author felt when arts were made except songs.
>>Actually, when I was really young, I didn\'t know that people can feel and understand how the artist felt when his or her art were being made except songs.
3. I mean, there are lyrics in songs so that it is easy to know their thinking by listening to them.
>>I mean, there are lyrics in songs so, it is easy to know their thinking by listening to it.
4. But for performance and art, it is a bit hard to understand their purpose.
>>CORRECT
OR>>But for performance and art, it is a bit hard to understand their meanings.
5. Whenever I\'ve been to museum, it was really hard to even know what they want to express.
>>Whenever I\'ve been to a museum, it has been really hard to even know what they want to express.
6. But I\'m hoping I can improve my quality about appreciating arts in the future.
>>But I\'m hoping I can improve on how I appreciate or evaluate arts in the future.
Good sentences.
- T. Melody ^^
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