artistes or bands

2020-06-29 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

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I used to be crazy about music and singers. Moreover, because I was a band member I was interested in music. But after I became a Christian I got less interested. Most of them are too loud I could not relate to the lyrics. I hardly listen to pop these days. Now strangely, I can relate to the lyrics of hymns Of course, there are some pops that nave a good emotional impact. I had a bad memory of being more depressed.

강사 첨삭

Hi Mrs. [Name]!
Thank you for doing your homework. You did great. You\'re really improving a lot. Keep it up! See you later in class.

Here are your corrections:

I used to be crazy about music and singers.

>> CORRECT

Moreover, because I was a band member I was interested in music.

>> CORRECT; there should be comma (,) after the word \"member\".

>> Moreover, because I was a band member, I was interested in music.

But after I became a Christian I got less interested.

>> CORRECT; there should be comma (,) after the word \"But\".

>> But, after I became a Christian I got less interested.

Most of them are too loud I could not relate to the lyrics.

>> Most of them are too loud and I couldn\'t relate to the lyrics.

I hardly listen to pop these days.

>> CORRECT

Now strangely, I can relate to the lyrics of hymns.

>> CORRECT

Of course, there are some pops that nave a good emotional impact.

>> Of course, there are some pops that have good emotional impacts.

I had a bad memory of being more depressed.

>> CORRECT

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