Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists

2020-03-02 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I think artists need a lot of freedom. But still it needs a boundary. I believe that being creative within the line is harder than just being creative. The artists\' job is to overcome that limit and bring the people new inspiration with different perspectives. Everyone needs freedom to develop their creativity. If only artists get the privilege, it will be not fair. Also if the artists get the exception with the value which everyone shares, many other people might speak out for their need with more freedoms too. So I think artists should have the same freedom as all the others.

강사 첨삭

Hi J!
This is pretty decent work.
You have chosen the right expressions to get your message across.
I hope you keep giving your best in all of our classes.
Please keep in mind that this practice is for you to develop your abilities.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think artists need a lot of freedom. 
>> Correct
But still it needs a boundary. 
>> However, they still need to respect boundaries.
I believe that being creative within the line is harder than just being creative. 
>> I believe that being creative without stepping over the line is harder than just being creative. 
The artists\' job is to overcome that limit and bring the people new inspiration with different perspectives.
>> The artists\' job is to overcome that limit and bring people new inspiration from different perspectives.
Everyone needs freedom to develop their creativity. 
>> Correct
If only artists get the privilege, it will be not fair. 
>> Correct
Also if the artists get the exception with the value which everyone shares, many other people might speak out for their need with more freedoms too. 
>> Also, if artists get the exception on the value which everyone shares, many people might speak out about their need for more freedom, too. 
So I think artists should have the same freedom as all the others.
>> So, I think artists should have the same freedom as well as all the others.

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