Ash mass

2016-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

학생이 쓴 원문

Today is the day of start Lent season. So. Moyse community where I belong to offered English mass and ash ceremony for foreign students and KDI students. Lent season started from today. So, many foreign friends were there. Every year, I have attended the English ash mass to play guitar for the mass and this year I was also asked to play guitar and lead the song. This year was a little bit special. Because more number of foreign came there to attend the ash ceremony. Half of increased number of foreign friends were students from KDI. KDI located in Sejong city is the institute that is made for the education for foreigner working other countries especially development countries. Korea government has been offering the Education for development countries KDI institute has been offering them free accommodation and some living cost and free education in English. Various nationalities student were there. Interesting thing was students from Africa countries where I haven't heard.

강사 첨삭

Today is the day of start Lent season.

>> Today is the day of the Lenten season.
 So. Moyse community where I belong to offered English mass and ash ceremony for foreign students and KDI students.

>> So the Moyse community where I belong which offers English mass and the Ash Wednesdayceremony for foreign students and KDI students.
 Lent season started from today.

>> The Lenten season started today.

So, many foreign friends were there.

>> correct!
>> or: So many of my foreign friends were there.

Every year, I have attended the English ash mass to play guitar for the mass and this year I was also asked to play guitar and lead the song.

>> Every year, I am attending the Ash Wednesday English mass too play the guitar and this year, I was also asked to play the guitar and lead song.

This year was a little bit special.

>> correct! 

Because more number of foreign came there to attend the ash ceremony.

>> Because the number of foreigners who came and attended the Ash Wednesday English mass  has increased.
 Half of increased number of foreign friends were students from KDI.

>> The number of those foreigner friends who are students from KDI has increased to half.
 KDI located in Sejong city is the institute that is made for the education for foreigner working other countries especially development countries.

>> KDI, which is located in Sejong city, is an institute made for the education of the foreigners working who are especially from developing countries.
 Korea government has been offering the Education for development countries KDI institute has been offering them free accommodation and some living cost and free education in English.

>> The Korean government has been offering scholarships for those who are from developing countries and KDI has been offering them free accommodation, living cost, and free education in English.
 Various nationalities student were there.

>> Students from different nationalities were there.
 Interesting thing was students from Africa countries where I haven\'t heard.

>> The interesting thing was that there were students from the African country where I haven\'t heard from.

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