Aside from graying hair, what do you think are the other bad effects of stress to our body?
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Managing stress is important because it have an effect for our body.
>>Managing stress is important because it has an effect to our body.
First, we want to avoid to get stressed, so we sleep longer than usual habit.
>>CORRECT!
If you sleep more these days than usual day, you should suspect whether you get stressed.
>>CORRECT!
Also, our skin change sensitively.
>>CORRECT!
Skin problem like pimple is appeared suddenly.
>>CORRECT!
Beside, it affects not only outside of but also inner part of body.
>>Besides, it affects not only outside but also inner part of body.
People can have some disease like indigestion and gastritis.
>>People can have some diseases like indigestion and gastritis.
Especially, hormone have a bad effect to women.
>>CORRECT!
Because of hormone imbalance, women can suffer many problem like menstrual irregularity.
>>CORRECT!
Thus, it is very important to manage our stress.
>>CORRECT!
The best way to manage stress is remove the factor which we get stressed.
>>The best way to manage stress is remove the factor which we get stressed from.
But, if it is not possible, we should have hobbies to relieve stress.
>>CORRECT!
Concentrating something can help to forget our stress.
>>CORRECT!
For example, when we exercise, body make an endorphin which is hormone to make ours happy.
>>For example, when we exercise, body makes an endorphin which is hormones to make us happy.
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