Aside from necessities, what one thing could you not go a day without?

2022-07-11 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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There must be many things for us to live with. For example, water, air, food and something like that. I need these necessities to live. But what we need for a living can be different from each other. What I need to live everyday are the following: First, I need my family. I can feel lots of love from my family and do many funny things with my family together. And all family members give me comfort and leisure. Next, I need books to read because I enjoy reading books very much and I have been reading books almost everyday. The books give me fun and lots of beneficial knowledge that I can use in school test. So I enjoy reading books very much. Lastly, I need hobbies, too. I can find my talents and develop them through hobby activities and whenever I enjoy my hobbies, I can feel comfortable and free. And hobbies help me to relieve stress and they help me to smile. In this respect, hobbies are so important in my life.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Rana!

Thank you for sharing and answering the question. See you later!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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There must be many things for us to live with. 
>> Correct! 
For example, water, air, food and something like that. 
>> Correct! 
I need these necessities to live. But what we need for a living can be different from each other.
>> Correct! 

What I need to live everyday are the following:
>> Correct! 
First, I need my family. 
>> Correct! 
I can feel lots of love from my family and do many funny things with my family together. 
>> Correct! 
And all family members give me comfort and leisure.
>> Correct! 

Next, I need books to read because I enjoy reading books very much and I have been reading books almost everyday. 
>> Next, I need books to read because I enjoy reading books very much and I have been reading books almost every day. 
The books give me fun and lots of beneficial knowledge that I can use in school test. 
>> Correct! 
So I enjoy reading books very much.
>> Correct! 

Lastly, I need hobbies, too. 
>> Correct! 
I can find my talents and develop them through hobby activities and whenever I enjoy my hobbies, I can feel comfortable and free. 
>> Correct! 
And hobbies help me to relieve stress and they help me to smile. 
>> Correct! 
In this respect, hobbies are so important in my life.
>> Correct! 

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