Aside from relieving the traffic congestion, what do you think could be the other advantages of buil
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Foreigners who have been to Korea said that how convenience the public transportation is from the subway to the bus system. Our government have tried to find a effective way to solve the traffic congestion in metropolitan area. The main solution is building the express train from cities near capital city to Seoul. Another way is constructing road on the ground. The population in Seoul is 1/5 of total population. It cause a lot of social problem including traffic jam. My city mayor implemented the campaign which called \"Self Carfree day\" that people can\'t drive their car on designated day according to their car number plate. It is effective campaign but people still want to use their car when they commute and take a trip even if the public transportation is convenient. In addition, more and more people have their car more than one even if public servants encourage people not to use their own car. I also believe that the transportation system is the best but people don\'t like to use it
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Foreigners who have been to Korea said that how convenience the public transportation is from the subway to the bus system.>> Foreigners who have been to Korea expressed their positive feedback on how convenient the public transportation here is, from the subway to the bus system.
Our government have tried to find a effective way to solve the traffic congestion in metropolitan area.
>> Our government has tried to find an effective way to solve the traffic congestion in metropolitan area.
The main solution is building the express train from cities near capital city to Seoul.
>> The main solution is building the express train from other major cities to Seoul.
Another way is constructing road on the ground.
>> Another way is constructing roads underground.
The population in Seoul is 1/5 of total population.
>> The population of Seoul is 1/5 of the total population of Korea.
It cause a lot of social problem including traffic jam.
>> It causes a lot of social problems including traffic jams.
My city mayor implemented the campaign which called \"Self Carfree day\" that people can\'t drive their car on designated day according to their car number plate.
>> Our city mayor implemented the campaign which is called \"Self Carefree Day\" that people can\'t drive their cars on a designated day according to their car plate number.
It is effective campaign but people still want to use their car when they commute and take a trip even if the public transportation is convenient.
>> It is an effective campaign but people still want to use their cars when they commute and take a trip even if the public transportation is convenient.
In addition, more and more people have their car more than one even if public servants encourage people not to use their own car.
>> In addition, more and more people have more than one car even if public servants encourage people not to use their own cars.
I also believe that the transportation system is the best but people don\'t like to use it
>> I also believe that the transportation system is the best but people don\'t like to use it.
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