Asking for help

Hi peter, It's [이름]. You are still coming to the party right? It sounds great. I really want to make this party awesome. In order to that , I need something. I know that you have a big speaker. don't you? If so, can you bring it to the party. It is very important for the perfect party. If we don't have it, we can't play music and people will get bored. The party is scheduled to hold at 9 p.m Could you come a couple of hours ealier? Thank so much peter.

Hi there [이름]! Nice imagination!:) Here are your corrections -Teacher JM  Hi peter, It's [이름]. >>>Correct. BETTER>>> Hi peter, this is [이름].You are still coming to the party right? >>>You are still coming to the party, right?It sounds great. >>>Correct. BETTER>>>That sounds great.I really want to make this party awesome. >>>Correct In order to that , I need something. >>>In order to do that, I need to ask a favor from you. I know that you have a big speaker. don't you? >>>CorrectIf so, can you bring it to the party. >>>CorrectIt is very important for the perfect party. >>>CorrectIf we don't have it, we can't play music and people will get bored. >>>If we won't have it, we wouldn't be able to play music and people will get bored.The party is scheduled to hold at 9 p.m >>>The party is scheduled to be held at 9 p.mCould you come a couple of hours ealier? >>>Could you come a couple of hours earlier?Thank so much peter. >>>Correct