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2013-08-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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I thought dating had been started when I become an adult. although there were many couples around me, I thought it's just a wasting time, feelings, money whatever that I had. In addition, I'm a person who are carried along by the atmosphere, I thought if I had a boyfriend in my teens, It would bring many obstacles to my study. Althought I had many nice boyfriends(sadly, it's just friends whose genders are male), I treated them just a friend and even i acted like a boy with no prude at all. Many of my friends said, "You're in poverty in the midst of plenty." And it's sure that I couldn't date with a boy. Futhermore, I have been too picky since I had many handsome, cool friends. I know that I can't date with a guy forever if I care about a man's terms, and I know that even there is no one who is perfect. The most important thing that I can't date with a guy is that I'm a student of women's university. if I had knew that I wil enter women's university, I would have changed my thought.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [Name]!!   Wow, such nice ideas you\'ve got in there. I totally appreciate your effort in sharing your composition with me. I agree that having boyfriends at such a young age is not really important. Young ones should focus more on their studies rather than having boyfriends. Anyway, thank you very much for doing your homework. You actually did great today!^^, Always, Kathrine ^^   I thought dating had been started when I become an adult. >>YOU MEAN: I think, I started dating when I bacame an adult. although there were many couples around me, I thought it\'s just a wasting time, feelings, money whatever that I had. >>Although there were many couples around me, I thought that it is just a wate of time, feelings, money and whatever I have.  In addition, I\'m a person who are carried along by the atmosphere, I thought if I had a boyfriend in my teens, It would bring many obstacles to my study. >>In addition, I\'m a person who\'s carried along by the atmosphere,I thought of having boyfriends in my teen age would bring many obstacles in my studies. Althought I had many nice boyfriends(sadly, it\'s just friends whose genders are male), I treated them just a friend and even i acted like a boy with no prude at all. >>Although I had many nice boyfriends(sadly, those friends are males),I treated them as a friend and I even act like a boy with no prude at all.  Many of my friends said, \"You\'re in poverty in the midst of plenty.\" And it\'s sure that I couldn\'t date with a boy. >>correct Futhermore, I have been too picky since I had many handsome, cool friends. >>correct  I know that I can\'t date with a guy forever if I care about a man\'s terms, and I know that even there is no one who is perfect. >>correct  The most important thing that I can\'t date with a guy is that I\'m a student of women\'s university. >>correct  if I had knew that I wil enter women\'s university, I would have changed my thought. >>If I knew that I will be entering a women\'s university, I would\'ve changed my mind.

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