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2014-04-15 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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If you wrote a book, what would you write about? I am a big fan of history. Especially I have a lot of interest of the war of the Middle age. The age before guns were invented, people fought with swords, bows, shields etc. The more armors were thick, the more the weapons were strong. And it was really difficult to occupy a castle. Some castles have never been occupied. So I want to write how the ones could protect from attack. And there were lots of weapons at that time. And it depends on the area. For example, Asian didn't have to wear thick armors because ancient Asian's cross bows is less stronger than Europe's. So if I wrote a book, then I would wrote about the change, differences between Asian's and Western's

강사 첨삭

Hi there Gyu!
Great morning to you!

Well, reading historical books are really exciting.
And I am actually fascinated by history books when I am reading about it.

Wars, evolution of one country, the people, culture, and anything connected to history are my thing.

Anyway, I hope that you would be able to write one someday.
And I would be your number one fan. kkkk

See you later!

Enjoy your day!


Always,

Kathrine ^^


If you wrote a book, what would you write about?

I am a big fan of history.

>> correct!

Especially I have a lot of interest of the war of the Middle age.

>> I especially have a lot of interests of the was during the Middle Age.

The age before guns were invented, people fought with swords, bows, shields etc.

>> correct!

The more armors were thick, the more the weapons were strong.

>> The thicker the armors are, the stronger the weapons they have.

And it was really difficult to occupy a castle.

>> correct!

Some castles have never been occupied.

>> correct!

So I want to write how the ones could protect from attack.

>> So I want to write how the ones was able to protect itself from the attack.

And there were lots of weapons at that time.

>> correct!

And it depends on the area.

>> correct!

For example, Asian didn\'t have to wear thick armors because ancient Asian\'s cross bows is less stronger than Europe\'s.

>> For example, Asians didn\'t have to wear thick armors because ancient Asian\'s cross bows is less stronger than Europe\'s.
 So if I wrote a book, then I would wrote about the change, differences between Asian\'s and Western\'s

>> So, if I would have written a book, then I would have written about the changes and differences between Asians and Westerners.

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