Assignment

2016-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

학생이 쓴 원문

What would your life be like without your mobile telephone? Do you think mobile telephones are dangerous in any way? -> If I live without my cellphone, I can feel how to wait something. Mobile phone gave us convenience. On the other hand, Cell phone made us impatient. But I think mobile telephones are not dangerous in any way.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Jacob! (^_^)   Thank you for accomplishing your homework right after our class. You really took the time so I appreciate it. I agree with your opinion but I do think that cellphones have disadvantages such as addiction especially for students or children. It could also give radiation-related diseases. :)   _T. Mayleen ^^   If I live without my cellphone, I can feel how to wait something. >> If I\'d have to live without my cellphone, I\'d be able to learn how to be patient.   Mobile phone gave us convenience. >> Mobile phones gave us convenience. OR: Mobile phones made our lives more convenient.   On the other hand, Cell phone made us impatient. >> On the other hand, cellphones made us impatient.   But I think mobile telephones are not dangerous in any way. >> Correct!

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