Assignment
학생이 쓴 원문
What would your life be like without your mobile telephone? Do you think mobile telephones are dangerous in any way?
-> If I live without my cellphone, I can feel how to wait something. Mobile phone gave us convenience. On the other hand, Cell phone made us impatient. But I think mobile telephones are not dangerous in any way.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Jacob!
(^_^)
Thank you for accomplishing your homework right after our class.
You really took the time so I appreciate it.
I agree with your opinion but I do think that cellphones have disadvantages such as addiction especially for students or children.
It could also give radiation-related diseases. :)
_T. Mayleen ^^
If I live without my cellphone, I can feel how to wait something.
>> If I\'d have to live without my cellphone, I\'d be able to learn how to be patient.
Mobile phone gave us convenience.
>> Mobile phones gave us convenience.
OR: Mobile phones made our lives more convenient.
On the other hand, Cell phone made us impatient.
>> On the other hand, cellphones made us impatient.
But I think mobile telephones are not dangerous in any way.
>> Correct!
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