Assignment
학생이 쓴 원문
How would the world be different if everyone on the planet enjoyed the same rights and no discrimination existed?
-> I think the most important thing is "what kind of rights people should be enjoyed?." And if everyone clames their own rights, The world would be confused.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Jacob! ^_^
Thank you for trying to express your thought and for acconplishing your homework.
This question actually focuses on equality.
There are some nations where men are treated better than women.
It\'s a topic that is quite difficult to explain but since we discussed it in class, we\'re able to figure some ideas about it.
Have a good night! :)
_Teacher Mayleen_
I think the most important thing is \"what kind of rights people should be enjoyed?.\"
>> I think the question should be \'What kind of rights should people enjoy?\'
And if everyone clames their own rights, The world would be confused.
>> If all people would claim their rights, the world would be confusing.
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