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2017-03-14 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I agree with some part of things. What we become old is that we would be out of shape and have some limited opportunities, lose confident state of mind. So even if I think I am young and I want to ignore the realities, We are limited to do something. But if we can keep the state of mind young, we can try to do everything though we are old and get good results of efforts. this kind of persons are energetic and strong confident and they can extend succeeded experiences so they know how to handle serious problems well. So they have a good and seamless communication skill so many people respect that person. They were welcome to anyplace. I doesn't matter whether someone is old or not.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Heidi!

Like they say, age is just a number, right?

Take care!

~T. Lynn

I agree with some part of things.

>> I partly agree with this.

What we become old is that we would be out of shape and have some limited opportunities, lose confident state of mind.

>> When we become old, we would be out of shape and have some limited opportunities, lose confidence and state of mind.

So even if I think I am young and I want to ignore the realities, we are limited to do something.

>> So even if I think I am young and I want to ignore the reality, we are limited to do some things.

But if we can keep the state of mind young, we can try to do everything though we are old and get good results of efforts.

>> But if we can keep our state of mind young, we can try to do everything though we are old and get good results because of  our efforts. 

this kind of persons are energetic and strong confident and they can extend succeeded experiences so they know how to handle serious problems well.

>> This kind of people are energetic and strong. They are confident and they can extend successful experiences so they know how to handle serious problems well.

So they have a good and seamless communication skill so many people respect that person.

>> So they have  good and endless communication skills so many people respect those people.

They were welcome to anyplace.

>> correct!

I doesn\'t matter whether someone is old or not.

>> correct!

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